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10:44 pm: Chronicles of Narnia Drabbles
Title: Changes
Rating: PG
Summary: Susan has changed. Written for [info]_ensoleille.

Peter stares down at the sleeping form of his sister. Susan is still wearing the black dress she wore to a party earlier that night, her hair is askew, and rouge and eyeshadow is smudged all over face.

Peter is struck, not for the first time, by how much she has changed.

In Narnia, she had been gracious and polite and not at all concerned with her appearance. She always thought of others before herself and was pained to see anyone who was suffering. In Narnia, she had been just as beautiful inside as she was on the outside. In Narnia, her hair had smelled of gardenia and her smile melted the hearts of men.

Susan is a completely different person now, and it breaks his heart.

But even though she spends all of her time in the mirror now, readying herself for a party, and even though her hair smells of cheap perfume and her smile is hardly ever genuine, she is still his sister and always will be.

And so he pulls the blankets around her, tucking her in, and kisses the top of her smooth forehead.

"Love you, Su," he says softly, just as he always does. For that is one thing that will never change.

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Title: Party Games
Rating: PG
Summary: Peter wants Susan to stay home tonight. Written for [info]simply_strange.

"Su, why don't you just stay home tonight?" Peter pleads, and he knows he sounds pathetic.
She smiles at him and shakes her head, her glorious hair shining. "I've been invited to the Washington's party. It's rude to turn down an invitation."

"You're never home anymore."

"Are you jealous?" she says coyly, turning to face him.

"Why would I be?" he responds.

"I don't know," Susan says. They stare at each other for a moment, and then she shrugs her shoulders and clasps a necklace around her neck.

Peter goes over to where she stands and she turns around, allowing him to button the back of her red dress. His fingers brush against her bare back and Susan shivers, goosebumps dancing across her pale skin.

"I don't know, either," he whispers into her ear, his heart racing, "but I know you want me to be." Susan blushes, and he smiles as his sister's resolve fades away.

And then she kisses him, hard, and he knows he has won this round.

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From:[info]simply_strange
Date:February 11th, 2006 04:43 am (UTC)
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Oh goodness. Wowww. You just know the right of kind of Peter/Susan - ness that I like. How do you do it? XD

Lovely characterization, as always. Just lovely overall, really. Mem-ing! =D
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 12th, 2006 03:22 am (UTC)
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*blushes*

Thanks so much, hon. I'm really glad you liked it. I think it's actually the one I wrote for you is my favorite drabble. :)
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From:[info]lovely_girl_
Date:February 13th, 2006 08:45 pm (UTC)
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The first one was sweet and the second one was, well...


"I don't know, either," he whispers into her ear, his heart racing, "but I know you want me to be." Susan blushes, and he smiles as his sister's resolve fades away.

ASDFGHJKL!!!111 Too good for a coherent review!!1
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 13th, 2006 10:02 pm (UTC)
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I'm glad you liked them! The second one is definitely my favorite. :D
From:[info]marwen17
Date:February 13th, 2006 10:39 pm (UTC)
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OMG! I LOVE YOU!

I love drabbles, it's a pet peeve of mine ;)
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 13th, 2006 11:27 pm (UTC)
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I love you back. :D

I'm glad you liked the drabbles! I tend to suck at them, so knowing they don't suck is a good thing. <3
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From:[info]narnialovers
Date:February 13th, 2006 10:49 pm (UTC)
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Amazing! I love them!!! Especially the second one! Good job!
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 13th, 2006 11:27 pm (UTC)
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Glad you like! *huggles*
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From:[info]_ensoleille
Date:February 14th, 2006 04:07 am (UTC)
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Awwww. It's so sad but so sweet. Poor Peter.
The second one is pretty cute too, but I like my on better. ;)
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 15th, 2006 01:39 am (UTC)
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Yay, I'm glad you liked them, hon. And I'm glad you like yours the best because I was thinking which P/S drabble fitted yours (and [info]simply_strange's) tastes better. :D
From:(Anonymous)
Date:February 14th, 2006 07:04 am (UTC)

hello! review!

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are they brother and sister in this? LOL
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 15th, 2006 01:41 am (UTC)

Re: hello! review!

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Peter stares down at the sleeping form of his sister.

she is still his sister and always will be.

Susan blushes, and he smiles as his sister's resolve fades away.

Does that answer your question? :)
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From:[info]rawthorne
Date:February 14th, 2006 05:16 pm (UTC)
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That was amazing. Very nicely written, good use of vocabulary, sufficient amount of detail. The characterization is very much left to our - and your - speculation since we only know so little about how Peter and Susan conducted their lives after Narnia. Yet nothing is to be criticized, nothing seems out of place.

The first drabble is the fluffiest of the two, I guess you could say, but it's also so regretful and sad that we kind of lose the sugary romance along the way. Or maybe it's just toned down. I don't know. In any case, whatever you did and how you did it, the drabble works and seems well constructed.

The second is my favorite of the two. The pleading and the taunting as they become attraction and lust and dominion is very intriguing. Your dialogue is written very realistically and rings true to the scenes that are concerned. I liked the combination of restraint and sexual desire in both characters and the way their resolve - dare I say, their world - lies on the edge of a knife... of a kiss.

Beautifully detailed and yet concise, I loved them. Good job!
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 15th, 2006 01:42 am (UTC)
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Thanks so much, hon! :)

The second one is my favorite, too. <3
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From:[info]fehrlybrendan
Date:February 15th, 2006 05:21 pm (UTC)
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Gosh, I really loved these! The second one is amazing. Thanks so much for sharing!
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 17th, 2006 03:32 am (UTC)
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Thanks! I'm so glad you liked them. :)
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From:[info]imperativa
Date:February 17th, 2006 02:51 am (UTC)
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YAY!!! I love these omgggg.
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 17th, 2006 03:34 am (UTC)
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I'm glad you liked them! :)
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From:[info]awritersfantasy
Date:February 23rd, 2006 04:21 am (UTC)
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Hello. Stalking the journal again. ^_^ The first one was cute.

"Are you jealous?" she says coyly, turning to face him.

"Why would I be?" he responds.

"I don't know," Susan says.

I especially liked that part. I'm curious- I don't know what you normally write for fan fics (slash and all that kind of stuff) obviously, but was the part with them kissing meant to be a hint at them loving each other as more than siblings? o.o I'm just wondering because and then she kisses him, hard, kind of tells me it'd be hard on the lips? Just wondering.

Good job. ^_^
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:February 23rd, 2006 02:23 pm (UTC)
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but was the part with them kissing meant to be a hint at them loving each other as more than siblings?

Yes, it was, LOL. (And it was on the lips.) ;)

I generally tend to write incest (i.e. Peter/Susan & Edmund/Lucy) for the Narnia fandom. I don't write it for my other fandoms, though, but for Narnia it just seems to fit. And I have never written slash before, either. :)

But I'm glad you liked the drabbles! :)
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From:[info]jelliclekat
Date:March 3rd, 2006 02:18 pm (UTC)
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Ahhh, you're corrupting me. XD XD Now I can't ever go back to thinking "Eek, Narnia isn't supposed to be slashed or incest-ed!" Your fics are just too good. :D!

"I don't know, either," he whispers into her ear, his heart racing, "but I know you want me to be."

...*wibble* *____*
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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:March 3rd, 2006 04:55 pm (UTC)
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LOL, I'm glad you liked these two! <333
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From:[info]pervyficgirl
Date:June 25th, 2006 03:15 am (UTC)
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Mmm. All sorts of yeah. Narnia incest wins at life.
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From:[info]herfaith
Date:July 29th, 2006 01:37 pm (UTC)
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Oh gosh I love the first fic!

But even though she spends all of her time in the mirror now, readying herself for a party, and even though her hair smells of cheap perfume and her smile is hardly ever genuine, she is still his sister and always will be.
I ♥ this paragraph.
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Date:June 17th, 2007 12:25 pm (UTC)

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From:[info]gryff_of_grace
Date:September 10th, 2007 05:53 pm (UTC)

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Um. What?
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